I agree with Patti. I love the straightforward, simple yet delicate wordplay in this.
Dear sir, a haiku is much more than just three lines. It has a syllable restricted structure in those three lines too, under 17 in the three lines. :) Whereas there are some form of haiku like the Kanshicho that allow freedom in syllables, at Haiku Heights, I request that you keep it below 17. Thank you.
There's a delicacy to this that I really like.
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ReplyDeleteThanking much PattiKen for the rich comment.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Patti. I love the straightforward, simple yet delicate wordplay in this.
ReplyDeleteDear sir, a haiku is much more than just three lines. It has a syllable restricted structure in those three lines too, under 17 in the three lines. :) Whereas there are some form of haiku like the Kanshicho that allow freedom in syllables, at Haiku Heights, I request that you keep it below 17. Thank you.
Love the way you've painted with words. Great haiku.
ReplyDeleteI wonder if the hummingbird knows that it's a symbol...
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Beautifully done! Very nice...
ReplyDeleteI love that the bird doesn't smash the flowers. He goes about his business so fast, but you are correct, he is careful.
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